Nice start, Will. Thanks for stepping up. Comments :
Either the argument boils dry or it doesn't. I'm not sure what your liberal use of 'inverted commas' means. 'Boils dry' means it doesn't really boil dry. 'David Blaine WR' means it's not really a David Blaine WR. Does it boil dry or not ? Is it a David Blaine WR or not ?
I think you've made a good start here at formulating the objector position with respect to the David Blaine event. Would you please continue ? This is getting close to the heart of the matter:
My suggestions:
- You've argued that the Blaine event is abusing AIDA and its athletes. Tell readers why this is so, and also why this is a reason to object. Your argument presumes that AIDA is universally regarded as sacrosanct. It obviously isn't ! Tell the readers why you think it is important to preserve the prestige and authority of AIDA.
- It is always easy, and always unpersuasive to characterize the objects of one's criticism as afraid and/or lazy. You say that the persons involved in the Blaine stunt can't be bothered or are too scared to use the AIDA rules. You don't explain why they should use the AIDA rules, and what evidence you adduce to support your contention that they are afraid or lazy. You don't name the people you're referring to. Tell the reader why anyone should care whether AIDA is involved, and how you know that specific individuals ( by name ) are too lazy or too scared to involve AIDA.
The action item you've proposed also seems to me to be a terrific first step at engaging this issue. It doesn't, however, tie back to your initial point about abusing AIDA. How will this action item mitigate or rectify damage to AIDA ? Will you, yourself, be active in the action program you've suggested ? If so, what will your chief motive(s) be ? If not, why not ?
Thanks for your time and energy on this issue. Please continue !
Either the argument boils dry or it doesn't. I'm not sure what your liberal use of 'inverted commas' means. 'Boils dry' means it doesn't really boil dry. 'David Blaine WR' means it's not really a David Blaine WR. Does it boil dry or not ? Is it a David Blaine WR or not ?
I think you've made a good start here at formulating the objector position with respect to the David Blaine event. Would you please continue ? This is getting close to the heart of the matter:
My suggestions:
- You've argued that the Blaine event is abusing AIDA and its athletes. Tell readers why this is so, and also why this is a reason to object. Your argument presumes that AIDA is universally regarded as sacrosanct. It obviously isn't ! Tell the readers why you think it is important to preserve the prestige and authority of AIDA.
- It is always easy, and always unpersuasive to characterize the objects of one's criticism as afraid and/or lazy. You say that the persons involved in the Blaine stunt can't be bothered or are too scared to use the AIDA rules. You don't explain why they should use the AIDA rules, and what evidence you adduce to support your contention that they are afraid or lazy. You don't name the people you're referring to. Tell the reader why anyone should care whether AIDA is involved, and how you know that specific individuals ( by name ) are too lazy or too scared to involve AIDA.
The action item you've proposed also seems to me to be a terrific first step at engaging this issue. It doesn't, however, tie back to your initial point about abusing AIDA. How will this action item mitigate or rectify damage to AIDA ? Will you, yourself, be active in the action program you've suggested ? If so, what will your chief motive(s) be ? If not, why not ?
Thanks for your time and energy on this issue. Please continue !